Not sure if this makes sense to anyone else…

Help me out here? Something about this sentence just doesn’t seem right, and I’m not sure if it’s just me being picky or what.

*I’ll have an escort meet you there.* Alex says, and drops out of the link before the protest they all feel bubbling through Leo’s mind can make its way into words.

Thinking of changing it to this instead:

*I’ll have an escort meet you there.* Alex says, and drops out of the link before the protest they all can feel bubbling through Leo’s mind makes its way into words.

Thoughts, ladies, gentlemen, and everyone in between?

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